Can you help me with my essay? I just want to know if there is something wrong with it?
Miami, Florida the Perfect Vacation Spot
A place to die, a place where the sun shine and individuals can enjoy of a wonderful paradise is where most people want to be for some of their time. Vacations are very special and they should not be forget. One spot in the world to consider for have a wonderful vacations is Miami, Florida because of their attractions, climate and landscape, and hotels.
Miami have many attractions that captivate the eye of many people. The beautiful beaches are a great place to feel the sun on the skin. Walking on the sand and feel when it tickles the feet is great. Hear the sound of the peaceful waves and the singing of the birds is like to be in a concert of romantic music. Look at the big ships and just imagine to be in a cruise make people just fly in their imagination.
The climate and landscape of Miami let people without words because it is just great to travel around an area where people can enjoy a day. The cool rarely touches the places of Miami and its surroundings’ and even on winter people can enjoy vacations there. Driving around the streets of Miami could be a pleasant experience because one could enjoy the flowers and the beautiful views of other things. The hot temperatures of Miami are perfect because one can wear sport clothing that goes perfect with the temperature. Visiting a variety of stores and other places is possible with the sunny days of Miami.
Miami is also known as a great place for its luxury and comfortable hotels near to the beach. After enjoying a long day everyone wants to rest in a comfortable place like a hotel on the shores. Taking a bath on the Jacuzzi an relax for an while is a great thing to do after of a joyful and tired day. After taking a shower the perfect thing to do is to lay down on the bed and watch TV for a while. On the next day on the morning wake up with the sounds of the waves an the sunshine of the morning.
Vacations are to enjoy and they should be in a place that will stay in the mind to remember the wonderful time. Miami, Florida is going to be always a perfect spot because of its’ beauties that contain. The beaches and the sand always make vacations wonderful for many people.
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anything will help, my grammar is bad and other things
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Wow Here is a lot of people asking but few heping hehehehe
Willie
July 28th, 2009 at 5:14 pm
Melissa
it sounds good but u have a couple of grammatical errors
July 28th, 2009 at 9:23 pm
Pearl
Here are some trivial corrections. The biggest problems you have are:
* agreement in number,
* recognizing transitive verbs, and
* using gerunds.
sun shines
enjoy a wonderful paradise
be forgotten
for a wonderful vacation (or “for having a wonderful vacation”)
its attractions, climate, landscape, and hotels
Miami has
eyes of many people
and the feeling when it tickles the feet
Hearing the sound
is like being at a concert
Looking at … imagining being on a cruise makes
leave people without words
its surroundings
in winter
can be … one can enjoy
goes perfectly
near the beach (or “close to the beach”)
on the shore
in the Jacuzzi and relaxing for a while
after a joyful …
to lie down
in the morning
and the sunshine
will always be a perfect spot
its beauty. (without “that contain”–or, alternatively, “the beauties it contains.”)
The words you use for temperature aren’t strictly wrong, but they carry the wrong connotations. Use “cold” rather than “cool” to describe unpleasant weather, and use “warm” isntead of “hot” to describe pleasant weather.
There are a few other things that are unidiomatic, but those are harder to explain and none of them are major errors.
July 31st, 2009 at 8:45 pm
Roland
Miami, Florida the Perfect Vacation Spot
A place to die for, a place where the sun shines and individuals can enjoy of a wonderful paradise. It’s where most people want to be for some of their time. Vacations are very special and they should not be forgotten. One spot in the world to consider for have a wonderful vacation is Miami, Florida because of its attractions,
climate,landscapes, and hotels.
Miami has many attractions that captivates everyone’s eyes. The beautiful beaches are a great place to feel the sun on the skin.The warm sensation when the sand tickles the feet is great. Hearing the sound of the peaceful waves and the singing of the birds it’s like to be in a concert of romantic music. To look at the big ships and just imagine to be in a cruise make people fly in their imagination.
The climate and landscapes of Miami let people without words(speech less) because it is just great to travel around an area where people can enjoy a day. The cool rarely touches the places of Miami and its surroundings and even on winter people can enjoy vacations there. Driving around the streets of Miami could be a pleasant experience because one could enjoy the flowers and the beautiful views of other things. The hot temperatures of Miami are perfect because one can wear sport clothing that goes perfect with the temperature. Visiting a variety of stores and other places it’s possible with the sunny days of Miami.
Miami is also known as a great place for its luxury and comfortable hotels near to the beach. After enjoying a long day everyone wants to rest in a comfortable place like a hotel on the shore. Taking a bath in the Jacuzzi and relaxing for a while is a great thing to do after a joyful and tired day. After taking a shower the perfect thing to do is to lay down on the bed and watch TV for a while. On the next day, in the morning waking up with the sounds of the waves and the sunshine of the morning.
Vacations are to enjoy and they should be in a place that will remain in the mind to remember the wonderful time. Miami, Florida is going to be always a perfect spot because of its beauty. The beaches and the sand always make vacations wonderful for many people.
It’s okay, although i changed a few things that i thought were a little bit wrong, so read it, and let me know what you think…